you got better! so now i can see this as a song!
the problem is you never create an atmosphere with your songs, just (sometimes catchy melodies)
the drums need to be less random; if you don't know how to make drums good just use someone elses sampled drums!
also you do not have a bass instrument! you need one to build atmosphere.
also, your strings! they are sampled. try to make some in sytrus and add some effects to it!
one more thing: effects, effects, effects.
hope you build apon my advice