I would like to suggest not using so many synths or keys, but maybe I am just biased. The dynamics were there. I liked the phrase you used in the beginning, that was pretty sweet.
The next thing I would do in this piece if I were writing it would be to change the key, and move to a different phrase, then come back the original one, do some more original jamming with it, then double chorus out.
That's actually a pretty good idea. I've been struggling with what to do with it for a while now. A key change is probably a great place to start.
Thanks for the review!