could have lost the intro, a little bit.
I like the voice, and I loved the last... maybe 20 seconds of it. Though if you listen to the very end... last 10 seconds, you could have definitely added drums to it, otherwise good. Also, the intro seemed to lag on, and I didn't really notice the bass until I brought the volume up a lot, but that's more my fault because I have crummy speakers. All in all, pretty good, just needs a little patchwork.