My review, your song.
Synths are kind of VGM in nature, rather boring on their own.
Melody is driven by playing scales up and down, and somewhat jerky pauses, neither will be crowd thrillers.
You need to make your writing more smooth flowing, at parts like 2:10 its just awkward. Try some simple percussion too to keep the beat more understandable, maybe just a simple kick and snare beat, nothing exceptionatly fancy.
Song progression feels simple like its ABABABAB (B being 'chorus' A being seperate melody, except in this case all A's are the same)
As you stated, this needs work, its not bad, but the best part is the end outro, which of the many positive things that could be said about a song, isn't making this a killer peice for me.
On a side note your piano stuffs pretty decent.
Thank you, I just tried it with a cool drum beat and I will soon post a remix of it.
Thank you allot I will try to smoothen it out and have it flow better so just thanks for the advice!
I listened to one of your songs it was great!