The piano notes at the beginning needed veloity variety imo - instead of all nbeing sort of at the same velocity and then delayed - give it more dimension!
I could have also done without the high pitched growling not long after that but imo I feel it takes away from the main voice and kind of cheapens it - the low growling at the end was fine though.
also the whole mixdown felt a little.. soft? Almost as if you took a bit of punch out of it - it feels smooth and all but a little too mixed down imo - some of the rawness is gone :) - and the volume has been lowered below.. standard volume so that I had to turn it up to get that same feeling- esay on the compression ;)
your voice is kind of getting lost back there too - you need to bring it out so that it takes more of a center stage instead of - this is how it sounds - it sounds like there is piano ambiance all around - which is good - guitarists on both side - which is fine - but then it sounds like the percussion is in the same stereo range as the guitars - when it should either be right behind them - or closer up and more well defined - atm its being drowned out - and then it sounds like YOU are standing BEHIND everything so that all your instrumentals are actually hindering people's abilitiy to hear your voice.
2:35 actually sounds better - the highly reverbed in the background chorus is a nice touch :)
it's a great song though - and nicely polished - however - there will always be things to improve - you've come a long way my friend but you still have a ways to go! ^^
like a homemade birthday cake its beautiful but some of the designs aren't quite perfect - keep up the good work and keep pumping out those tunes dude!
I hate to ruin your streak with a 9 but I would kinda be cheapening my own voting system if I gave a 10 - although it's close to a ten ;)
the elven ears hath spoken!