Pirate Poem

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There once was a pirate,
he sailed on his ship,
one fateful day he went on a trip.

With treasure in mind,
and wind in his sails,
he hoped he would find
an island free of males.

The wenches they teased him,
the sirens they pleased him,
he knew he had found,
the ultimate kingdome.

He was there just one week,
the outlook was bleak
he had been blead dry,
"You wenches ain't cheap!"


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Ahhh, the trials of a lusty pirate!

I envy people who can make rhyming couplets and they don't sound awkwardish! Your reading could use a little work - but the poem itself is sound! Also, the repeating background SFX was a little distracting - best just to find some sea SFX that can go the full distance rather than something that's on a 5-second loop.

Outlaw88 responds:

This was a learning experience for me so constructive criticism is just what I need. Thanks for being honest.


It's okay but i didn't like to much. The sea sound in the back is nice.

Outlaw88 responds:

Thanks for the fair vote man.

Meh...kind of a weak voice

wasn't a whole lot of pirate-y-ness in your voice. And when there was, it quickly went away when you got caught up in reading the poem. I like the poem, but the tempo was very mechanical and dry. i felt like there could've been a bit more emotion and exaggeration in your voice and tone. Good job, though :D

Outlaw88 responds:

I would have added more things to do with my voice but I wanted to be sure I stayed within the time limit. Plus I was trying to make sure people could understand what I was saying. Still, not bad for my first attempt at voice acting.

Thanks for the review! :)

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Aug 26, 2009
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