Awful.

Even though it is a loop, it still needs too have alot happening.
This sounds like maybe 2 instruments stacked on each other.
You do have some good instruments in there, however.
This kind of sounds like more of an experiment though, unfortunately.

...wow.

You know in its own way it has some beauty. I don't know i could hear this in a flick or something when something goes completely haywire in a work station or something like that. Or a brain dead monkey throws poop at people hah.. All in all it could be better but i can see use for this.

Wyldfyre1

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I think I fail to catch the meaning or the rhythm

If you managed to work a bit with the keys and probably take everything else out it might sound good