With this song, I dont have a real sence of orginization with it, and it just kinda feels like it's there, not really doing anything but just trying to be a song. Usually, a song has a consistant 16 measure melody that you can follow or alter, as long as you know the rules to it. I would work on getting the orginaztion better, but that's my oppinion.
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lol im not really good wit that kinda stuff