I know this is your first song. I didn't do any better for my first too, so I'll tell you the truth. There is nothing which would attract listeners, because it is too repetitive. Same beat goes with the same bass pattern whole time, and then kicks are a little too quiet. I think you should make it more diverse. There is no much of additional sounds too, only some toms and ride. Hopefuly this addition exist. Try to play with some synths, pianos, plucks, strings or anything which would add some vibe.
I hope it would help you with your next creation, or you could remade this one and resubmit it.
ty for input
Pretty good for a first attempt. One thing I honestly hate is the drum beat in the beginning. Too many songs have this. Sure its pretty dramatic and all, but not original. Keep trying!
thanks for comment