Bass needs fixing
The bass at 0:40 is really out of tune. Also, the intro is too long. After 30 seconds your expecting much more of an explosion of sound, as apposed to just the addition of the hihat.
Try playing around with more melodies. It gets really repetitive after about 1 minute.
Its an okay idea, it just needs more tinkering.
yea, but this one is rated lower then the older one?? wtf