Improved, much better
Much better. A feel a little more close to home. I enjoyed most of it, especially the outro. The transition around 0:46 was a little wierd. And the reversed drums (or w/e) @ 1:20 were a little uneasy. But overall the song was good.
5/5 - 9/10 - Good Job.
A 10 is to fix the uneasy portions. But it is still good without an additional editing, which I do not expect you to do.