Alright that was pretty uninspired.
We have two breaks, a piano, and some string instrument. Kind of a small selection, with a few weird vocal bits tossed in.
The song presents a pretty disjointed mood with the unfitting combination of tones from each instrument or sample.
Short, little to no buildup, and boring.
Here's a piece that uses similar elements, but in a much better way.
But really, keep working on it.