Heh

This did not came from heaven but surely is praise for heavens for being out there for us

Well

I have to agree with my homeboys; tijnn and OPQC :P it's very repetive.. The review with "Gay.." haha made my LOL.
The melody is good, the mastering is.. okay.. not the best, try to use parametic EQ2, reverb, waveshaper etc. just try to look around!

It could be soooo much better..

The repetiveness drives me nuts at 1:30 .. if i heard this more then once i would make suicide xD

Helth
5/5 - Keep it up man!

To be Fairly honest:

Okay... I'm gonna be very honest with you now (:

Points that you shoud look out for in the future:
-The mastering: Try to seperate the frequences of the bass and the leads, you might want to go with a deeper bass or a higher lead, or filter out the low from the lead, and filter out the high of the bass a little bit with some equalizing

-The beat, it just wasn't strong enough. It's like a house-ish beat with a little more pump, but it doesn't quite work well enough to give the song that power boost it really needs

-This is the main problem: You're melodies are FOUR bars long, well, this is not a lot, in fact, it's not a lot at all. You should make a couple of patterns or make the melodies a little longer, It's constantly the same, you change the drums / instrumentation etc a little bit, but the lead is going on and on and on and on...

If you make your songs a lot less repetetive it's seriously 500% better.

-The instrumentation itself. I recommend you get Nexus XP packs, or spend some more time making your own sounds and if that doesn't work out for you, spend more time on actually selecting sounds.

What kind of sounds you're using in a song is actually what shapes the feeling of the song.

-Balancing and Dynamics:

I'dd like to see you play around with the balancing a bit more, and also with dynamics. From the first second till the last, the volume is about at the same level, if you do a few breakdowns, or a soft intro that builds up, the interest level of a song is going through the roof!

I hope i helped you with this, nonetheless, it was good (:

-Monodisc

gay.......

fuck........ this sucks

Hrm

It seems your bass.. and lead are kind of clashing..

your drum kit could also use a beefing..

but you do have a good start going here.

I wouldn't consider this anything beyond WIP though.