I hope the full version is longer, though.
The piece is too short to be judged as a whole, in my opinion, so the rating is just for the melody/choice of instruments. And you definitely have a nice melody.
I was solely looking for feedback on what you can hear with melody/sound choice.
Impressive sound quality. I think you should keep the beat and modulate or imitate your melody higher for a bit and then either break it down or change chord progs and melodies.... or you could give the melody a break a bit.
Honestly, I'm no expert, but that's kinda what I felt coming lol
I felt the exact same, I just didn't think it... "right" to have a modulation so early in the song.