Quite frankly, this falls in line with most of the trance and techno music I've listened to for years. Melody did get a bit repetitive, and maybe overkill for the snares at the beginning, but as for everything else, I found little flaws. A new melody twist and, more or less, snare usage, and this song would be as good as gold. As for the buildups, that's to come naturally. Trance, techno, dance, and more are a lot like that, or tend to be like that. Saying otherwise is a lie.
My personal opinion, you really nailed a lot of solid areas, but I agree, it could use some more flare in other areas, and less in others. Be that as it may, you still did a great job.
3 / 5 --- 8 / 10 --- DLed