Hmmm...

Don't get me wrong, the song and you both have great potential. Turn down your pedal a little, chuck in some slowish bass and drums, maybe raise the volume of your mic just a touch so we can understand you properly instead of scattered words?

Also, it ended kinda suddenly... maybe fade out next time. You know what would kick ass even more? Adding in a church-organ sound, just chords, for that extra vampire-like kick. That, and some creepy-ass high-pitched wailing that sounds like a choirboy's balls being slowly crunched in a vice... Less drone, more tone.

I'm not trying to mock you at all: in fact, I quite liked it. I believe I want to hear more of your stuff. Keep it up! ;3

u suck balls

seriously either u suck or ur equipment sucks, but u cant sing fuck ass, u insult me