It's certainly better than my first song. Maybe try to make it flow a little better. The choppyness makes it sound kinda wierd.
Thanks, but I practiced for this one, so it's not really my first. Just the first one to be put on NG.
Nothing special. It could use better transitions.
I'll do that on the next songs I write. Thanks for the helpful critcism.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.