It's missing a lot. You have the melody down, I suggest you use a different sound effect. This is simple. Sometimes simple is good, but then there's lacking. If you work at this, you could really master it. You've been getting better and this isn't BAD, it's just empty. The components are there, but no flair. I still highly enjoy this though.
Thanks for the rev! The software i used for this is very simple. no FX, limited to 2 synths, monophonic each, and 4 drum tracks.if i could, i would redo it, but i feel i have already worked at this song a little too much.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.