beat by THE FATMAN (NuclearStrike)

It's my first submission so criticism is encouraged
i wanted to re record 1 more time but i figured why not post it
tell me what you think!

oh and broken needle im expecting sometihgn back :)

Broken needle I don't think you know who you're fuckin with
Broken needle I don't think you know who you're fuckin with
Broken needle I don't think you know who you're fuckin with

im crazy in this rap game
Amazing when it happnin
Sit back and stare like damn is this happning??
Honey did get the camera?
Did you bring the film babe?
look over there, is that a needle on the stage
No need to worry folks, this needle a joke and
look *crack* this needle can be broken
my potency is spoken so listen closely
addicts replay this shit to overdose on me
put it on repeat and fall into a daze
if someone played your shit they'd get boo'd off the stage
tear out that page of your princess diary
no not the one about you're incest fantasies
the one with the crap you'd compose to combat me
try to entrap me, you'll just add to my rap sheet
I don't mean my criminal record, I mean my record
wanna jump me, I don't got time for checkers

folks lets get back to the feature presentation
kids please relax, blast your speakers and be patient

a needle is as sharp as the point on its point is
how sharp is this needle if his points are all pointless
needless to say, where this needle is today
is feeble minded play that people cant relate to
change the pitch, but you'd have to change fate too
to make it in this bitch man you'd have to calibrate you
quit contemplatin you should change ya hobby
clean up ya act up, you're outrageously sloppy
you'll sleep in the lobby, while ill be in the suite
blew it all on the dentist cuz my life was too sweet

you just couldn't resist takin a bite out of it
tight cuz u got dissed and this white boy can spit
but you wouldn't believe that my ammo is packed
got an arsenal stacked for a nuclear attack
like

you don't think I really blew it all on your name
poems in my dome growing like some rogain
you don't really think I blew it all on your name
rhymes in my mind blowin up like propane
tick tick tick BOOM
call epa, clean up the toxic waste and
call the doc, we got a hypoxic patient
got some abrasions to the soul and ego
will he ever rap again, we don't know
damn son, this just aint your time
update yourself, you're outdated like dimes
ya lines are so light but my light is so lime
ill get you a book to teach you to write rhymes
but you wont get a career even with rap knowledge
You're probably better off in a liberal arts college

But you just couldn't resist takin a bite out of it
tight cuz u got dissed and this white boy can spit
but you wouldn't believe that my ammo is packed
got an arsenal stacked for a nuclear attack
like

-PROZE!