meehhhhh......

You've got the melody.....
You've got a damn good idea for a song.......
But ill be damned if that synth bass doesn't get irritating as all hell! It worked for about 45 seconds, giving it an almost "Perfect Dark" kind of mood, but when you started bringing the melody up and stuck with the synth at the same two tones (which repeat monotonously through the whole damn song!) I just wasn't following your mood anymore.
you could do with alot less brass in the middle of the song too.