Still good
Almost as good as the other version you did.
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Still good
Almost as good as the other version you did.
Couple things
What are the chords you used for the guitar parts? They seem really dissonant for a pop piece. Maybe it's just the distortion playing tricks on me.
The piano part loses it's catchyness after the first time it's introduced. Try some syncopation to keep it interesting and original.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.