Ok... I think its awesome you tried to remix it. I just think it was poorly done (no offence!!) I'm sorry... It's just the tune is too high and the low parts are ominous. it's just not a good match up. Kepp up the work and practice practice practice! you will find something that works! :)
Way too high pitched. It feels like a bad carnival tune.
A little bit of advice...
don't up the ton next time, it just kind of ruins it, but I must admit, you had a decent choice of nstruments
I like the effort to create a song this way, but you should really listen to the song again.
You had the wrong keys for the song. Good attempt though.