Another attempt at good music

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Constructive criticism only please.
I want to improve.



I think the melodies are way too soft as other people have said. Not much going on, louder, more action is needed. Good try though.

hanorotu responds:

Wow old song, but thanks.
I have GREATLY improved since this. You should check it out lol


Don't be discurraged by my rating. Not really enough going on here... your main melodys are much too soft compared to the percussions which seemed to be most of what you heard. And since your melody is of such low freq. and the percussions are louder and sharper and theres not much else going on other than a low freq bassline, your ears tend to focus on the percussion rather than the main body of the song.

This is very early stage, but can definitely become a good song. Just keep at it and do your best. Good luck!

1.49? pfft! should be in the low 3's so I'll throw my 5.25 X 5 which brings it to a... 2.33... wish I could do more for ya.

hanorotu responds:

I appreciate it. I will keep on at it :D

Akopa pretty much said it all

You just need more going on in here!
The melody itself isn't bad at all, but that's all that there is. Add a countermelody, effects, bassline, more percussion (if necessary). Then add a lot more variation to all of that. All in all, it's not too bad (a lot better than most of the shit on here :P )

Keep it up!

P.s. If you have the time, come check out my new song. I could always use a review! :)
http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/liste n/251757


I found it all right...
But it had VERY Sloppy transactions.
I also found it got quite repetitive after awhile...
You need bass, variation, sequences, all sorts of things.
All you have here is.
1. A synth that changes every nine bars or so, then changes back.
2. a beat that really is NOT trance at all.

Overall, i didn't find it that enjoyable.
So im giving you 6/10 - 3/5.

Checkout my new song: http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/liste n/251338

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2.91 / 5.00

Jul 3, 2009
9:29 PM EDT
File Info
2.4 MB
2 min 4 sec

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