It really needs a stronger beat.
It's an excellent remake of the song, but I have to admit, with the faint airiness of the main beat along with the echo, it's very hard to keep track of the original beat, leaving the tune to fall of a placid, slightly rhythmic chaos. If you were to suddenly make the main beat sound a lot stronger and with less echo at 0:26 and on (sans bridges), it would sound a lot better in my opinion. As it is right now, it takes effort to hear the actual beat, buried beneath heavy echo and a simple pad thump. I really suggest you remake this song, as I know you could make this a lot better if you just made the main synth much more prominent. Chances are it would sound amazing then.