No really beat, sounds like you threw various sond effects over on another. A real beat has a form of flow and a rhythm to it. Next time try and removing the coy bell, that what seems to ruin the piece the most.
I wish I could give you more stars, but... look, I want to help you out here.
I think you were trying to make something a little unique here. Which is fine. In fact, that's a very good thing. Your problem is that it's too unique. Although each individual pattern on each instrument works... they don't work TOGETHER.
You still have to obey certain rules when you're writing any kind of music - even just drum beats. No matter how unique you want it to be, certain guidelines have to be followed or it just doesn't sound right.
If you want some more help give me a shout.
Sorry, djwizz. Work on your skills a bit - you've got some groove, just make it sound right together.
tell me to improve please... thanks
Way to repetitive.