The instruments do allright
but the vocals are buggin me. maybes its jus preference.
the chorus has a good feel to it tho. and the second half of the song is shaping up better than the first.
ah well i think it does alright!
Well, I'm glad you've written something, but unfortunately it's impenetrably vague. You make no specific comments on melody, harmony, chord progression or rhythm so I can only assume you actually know nothing about music. If you are enraged by the previous statement, I can only tell you to prove me wrong.