The beat isn't all that bad and you got something going for ya for just getting FL studio 8 =). We've all had our slayer moments but oh man... it just hurts the ears soo much (slayer does). I'd say look for yourself some VST's and soundfonts. That'll help out a LOT. You obviously have the talent for a good melody. I'd like to see it put to use on a digital instrument that sounds good. Keep it up however!
thanks so much for the tips, really. I'll try and look into getting a decent sounding guitar. i won't submit another song until i do :P
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