A strong effort
Don't be offended by this score which is lower than you've received so far, because I have enjoyed the track. Though I may not make music or compose myself, I hope that when I apply myself creatively others would dispassionately compare my work against the potential within my medium. But I'm inexperienced as a music critic too, so I haven't found a good vocabulary for describing where this music falls short. But I will try to say something useful for you.
I enjoyed the phrases this track introduced; they did seem to remind me of fun memories of handling big guns in death match. There track created some tension across its duration, as it set up variations of these phrases, but the tension wasn't quite enough to urgently anticipate what follows. I imagine limited tension could be attributed to the tonal variation it demonstrated. In other words, this song had an attractive voice, but the paragraph it spoke wasn't as compelling.
Pardon my ineptly subjective qualifiers; I'm afraid I may appear to contradict myself as I attempt to rationalize impressions I don't typically give words to. The choral element felt like a decent effort to expand the track's musical territory, and a few scales travelled contributed energy. But as I take the track as a whole, it exhibits a sameness - in the lower registers, I feel. A percussive background without aspiration.. it seemed to stay where it started.
Two different composers come to my mind: Bach & Nine Inch Nails. JSB was a master at layering patterns in the foreground, the background & in-between, and inventing clever ways to pack them inside each other. The effect of listening to his music is to always be recognizing something as new what you'd before only noticed in passing. NIN accomplishes great layering too with modern instruments.