Boring opening but then you tell that effort was out into this but it does not help the melody to become badass it is at most not bad
I liked the song overall, but I kind of wonder what you were going for. If you are wanting a club like dance trance, then I think you need some longer sections with just the drums. I think it has pretty good potential to be better, so I'd encourage you to come back to it at some point, even if it isn't for a while ;)
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.