I see you made a quite good start ;)
As for me: my first song wasn't so successful.... It has a good rhythm, but the beginning should be longer.
LOL great beat i liked it!
my dad's beat isnt very good D:
since it ends up with me having to come up with a new excuse for the worried teachers who question the smell of alcohol always coming from his musty breathe
for a first time it ain't all that bad but your making the same mistake as i did,keep your experiments to yourself till you get someware then start posting and taking the critisism to perfect the songs/styles/rythm's w/e