What does it need?
You're good, this must have needed lot of work to be completed.
What do I suggest to improve it? Chorus. Maybe adding some background effect like one or two (maximum) chorusy strings will fill it up a bit.
And a small advice that helped me: NEVER - I mean it :) - use just kick without anything else for drum, like 0:57-1:07 and 1:45-1:54.
The parts I liked most were 0:00-0:18 and 0:28-0:38. Just remember that the keys are patience, and variety. Don't stop creating, you sound promising.
this is wierd, good drum beat tho
A tad bad, it is empty, needs a melody, a chorus, a structure, SSOMETHING. It needs organisation but u got some good things in there.