Good, untill 2:00
I don't know what's wrong with FBlue, but this is better than the original. It is very smooth, and less techno-ish (techno sounds make your song sound blurry and boring). But it gets repeating at 2:00. You shouldn't repeat the base melody too much. Most songs go new melody:base melody:new melody:base melody. Off course, those are songs with lyrics, but you just repeat your base melody about 20 times. More than half of the song consists of your base melody.
original was better
i don't really know why but the original sounded way better. the melody that starts after the intro is a few pitches to high ofr my taste but that's where the flaws end.
finally the good ones again. 8/10 4/5
I enjoy the smooth way that all of the sounds flow together. Even the more techo-ish parts of the song stay smooth and relaxing.