The intro was well done and had me looking forward to the beat breaking in, but when it did it was a bit disappointing. You have some good melodies and great structure but the overall sound is REALLY weak.
The drums need way more impact, the kick sound is alright but it's buried in the mix, the hi-hat needs more bite (I can barely hear it) that strange chiptune-like fuzz on the snare is not working. You could really use some crash cymbals/gongs/sheet metal/explosions, any thing to jar the ears a bit.
Good effort for sure, bu it's all just too smooth, like an elevator music version of industrial.
I know. I'm still going back and editing a lot of my work, but keep in mind that I don't work with outside samples. All I have is what FL Studio comes with, and unfortunately I don't have the money to buy awesome programs or torrent on this computer because it's not mine. I'll definitely keep what you said in mind for when I master it though. Thanks for the review!