wow man, that guys a pr!ck. this isnt to bad i just think it needs more, its a bit to empty/quiet. but nice melody you got going. Keep it up man!
if you want to make this song a little better here's what you can do.
first cut off your ears and remove anything that can make you hear
then study a few years of theory in college
eat more celery
then stop writing music all together
there is no hope for you
......pretty cool beat tho dude!