has potential but its gonna take alot of work. you got the melody, the piano is good, and you got a nice bass. now to the neggative stuff. i would fix the overall sound, it sound compressed and fuzzy. definetly need to be mastered. Also i would like to hear a lead synth( maybe layer a square synth with a saw syth with each on playing every other note)or a perferably a hands up synth, it would compliment the overall sound. Maybe add a breakdown with a piano solo topped with a nice breakbeat and slowly build into the melody again.
It was good
The only problems were that it was a bit fuzzy and It got pretty repetitive. Great work though.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.