I scraped my mind for suggestions and I was thinking that the really high (loud) bass you added after the cymbals would probably sound better every other note rather than each note on the strings. That would direct your attention more on the strings. Try also making the bass QUIETER, and adding another element to the song that compliments everything, like a solo of sorts. Something to keep the measures interesting. I noticed that when the cymbals and nass came in that I was bored with the strings loop. Hmm.. THis is pretty eerie. It's missing things though, and I don't really know what there is to say. I'm more random when I make my tunes, I add lots of different sounds. This would sound alot better to be if there was more going on, but that would change the mood of the song, and maybe what your intention for the use of this song also. =)
Download a couple songs by a guy called "Shpongle" and see if he gives you any ideas..Really insane stuff. Mushroom Music.
Maybe these suggestions will give you an idea on where to go with this song. =)
Pretty good start I'd say! Look forward to seeing it finished.
thx 4 the suggestions ill get right to it. and that schpong is pretty fuckin crazy!!! :D anyho thx.