that would be a great opener to a song but you need some explosion into a very fast high paced song. use this for the beginging of a floor stomping song.
The song is a little bare. But still interesting. But the biggest thing I would like to point out is that your bass is offkey. (use the "fine" knob if you are on FruityLoops, which it wounds like, to adjust your bass fittingly. Also the drum at the end overlays and your levels aren't quite equalized for the better. Aside from the mastering and subtleties I see much potential for MUSIC, but remember the sound is just as important part of music as the melodies themselves and can make the difference between something magical, and something wasted or something that needs work. If you have any questions, comments or response to this review my email is Raza_Sogekihei@hotmail.com