A good start, but I feel you could do with some backing.
I don't know whether it's intentional, but at the moment it feels very empty.
0:14-0:16 feels disjointed, a "break beat" I find is usually more effective once the track has gone on for longer and is more established.
Up the overall intensity of the bass throughout and I could see this being a hit.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.