It sounds ok
but, I like a song with a steady beat.... and there was no drumming at all. if you would have but a steady beat in, it would have helped a lot. (the movement of the song would have changed and made it better)
i thought the melody was ok and it sounded fine.
but because of the lack of a beat.... it sounded like a big intro to me.
While you've got the instruments and such correct, it was really hard to find a melody here besides the first one. When it gets to the middle it's almost as if they were completely random notes going a half-step higher with each beat.
So the things you did correct here were the beginning and the ending. You need to work on combining melodies together and making sure they're in harmony with each other. I'm thinking that you just need more examples and inspiration from fellow Trance/Techno artists around here.
Start from there, and keep working hard. You'll get there soon if you do. =)
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.