learn some music theory and sound design. right now it doesnt quite sound good. not the worst song on here tho. (Highly recommend you to learn some music theory)
oh wow, this must have been about 10 years ago, dont sugarcoat sweetheart, its complete helm but thanks for being nice :) x
Generic and boring.
There's no hook. Your melody is repeated throughout the song. Your percussion sounds fake, and it doesn't fit with the rest of the song.
Try to add interest by varying your themes. Work on your song structure. Vary the percussive rhythms.
It's just... generic and uninteresting.
You got some pretty good ideas going..
But I would have choosen some other sounds to some of the melodies..
The drums is not all that they could have been..
It gets pretty repetetive, but many songs does that..
I like some parts of it..
The ending is.. lacking potential.. okay, it sucked... sorry but the is very stupid..
you just need to practise, and your ideas has potential.
2/5 - 4/10
fair nuff, first try.