The vocals are a bit too breathy (in the beginning) for me, but I love the overall heaviness that's just radiating off this song. Maybe a bit more of a bassline. I'm the lead lyricist and vocalist of a surf-rock band that I'm putting together.
I have two big-ish complaints. One: your singing style seems derivative. Two: your lyrics leave a lot to be desired. I mean, I know it's just a rock song, but they aren't really that good. You could play at a higher level with better lyrics.
Also, if you used an ostrich guitar (if you don't have a sitar or balalaika) for the acoustic part at around 4:00.
Hope I was helpful!