Good idea, room for improvement
You've got the right ideas, and you have most of the key elements. A few suggertions: I'd try and bring out the bass a bit more, and give it more thwump. The melodies could have a little more shape as well, but that's preference.
Definitely a great start, keep up the good work Glanvar!
If you have the time I'd appreciate your ideas on my latest piece, ST Suspense!
If i ever make a game this is one of my choices
thanks man =-)