I agree with MickeyMao
It has this sort of macabre feeling to it, that the hi hat really takes away from, also all in all i think the drums should be toned down alittle bit. My favorite part was the ending, I think thats where it fit together the best (especially with the sound clip of "its a nightmare", purely genious)
To some things up all together it was good stuff, you got some talent. Just need to refine your skills alittle bit and buff out the rough spots. I look forward to your future work.
This is a pretty decent beat,its gritty, it reminds me of Gotham City at night, for some reason. Im not really digging the hi hat though, it might be a little to overpowering. Nicely done for a first beat, keep at it!