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Uploaded
Mar 22, 2009 | 6:31 PM EDT
File Info
Song
2.8 MB
2 min 1 sec
Score
4.27 / 5.00

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Score:
Rated 4.27 / 5 stars
Plays & Downloads:
799 Plays | 79 Downloads
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Genres:
Electronic - Trance
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Author Comments

nu style, foo

This is NOT the finished version. I'd like suggestions, plz. KTHXBAI

--alex

EDIT: FINISHED VERZHUN HEARE: http://www.newgrounds.com /audio/listen/226190 (remove spaces)

Reviews


HellstickHellstick

Rated 3 / 5 stars

Please dont hate me:(

The kick at the beginning is a little "thin" for an actual hardstyle kick but it actualy works fine for the intro. It's like "silence before the storm" or something:P The bass is awesome as well but i'd suggest you add some sort of filter to it. Perhaps remove some of the trebble or something.
The synth is fucking kickass too:P

Anyway, the intro is about 15 seconds long... That's WAY to short. You completely left out the buildup and it makes the song seem too hasty - like "Fuck the buildup lets get down to it straight away!". Perhaps that'd be a good thing in som acosiations but in this case it simply doesnt work out. it's usually a good idea to wait at least 30-60 seconds before you bring in the lead like that:S
I dont really sense any real conection between the intro and "qlimax" eather. It's like I jumped from one song to another:S
The lead synth is nice and so is the melody it plays. You should add more reverb to it though. The kick is nice too, but you really need to add more bass. I gotta give you props for the way you arranged your kicks though:P Nice variation on that part:)

After the lead comes a break of sorts at 1:18 which is almost identical to the intro. It's not powerfull enough and doesnt work out. The kick is the main problem here. It worked ok for the intro, but def not for the break.
The synths in the break stops at 1:31. This leaves the kick and the bass alone and it seems even more empty then before:S I'd suggest you do something about the claps in the ending as well... They sound odd and out of place...

In general: I'd really suggest you do something about your progression. It sounds like you mixed 2 different songs togeather so you'll need a smoother transition in order to fix that problem.
You should also add some more elements: Percussion, effects and so on.
The score in general is really not based on what you've made but rather what you HAVEN'T made. What i mean by that is that this is simply too minimalistic. Each individual sound is ok, but you need to polish them up, add more details, and make your song more "full" if you get what i mean:)

Sorry if my review seemed rather harsh... I am not trying to attack your music or you as a person and nor do i try to kill your lust for creating music (some have thought i did when i left them this kind of reviews but it really isnt what im trying to do). I'm simply trying to help you improve by pointing out which parts of the songs needs to be fixed and what can be done better and so on.

ANYWAY, im currently working on my own entry as well, so expect it to be up sometime in the future:)
See ya around!

-Hellstick

Ps- please do feel free to send me a private message if you want me to clarify anything i said in this review:)


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theta4 responds:

Yeah, I'll try to make it blend better. Those beginning and end parts were added to...well, just to have something there.

Anyway, thank you for your review. The song isn't finished yet. I just wanted to get some opinions on some of the stuff in the song before pouring my life into it :)

Also, longer reviews are better. It's a lot better than those short reviews that say things like "great song!" and nothing else.


ONESTEPAHEADONESTEPAHEAD

Rated 4.5 / 5 stars

AWESOME

YOU HAVE SOME VERY GOOD SYNTHS! BUT IT DOESN'T FEEL FULL IN SOME PARTS LIKE FROM :40 TO 1:20 IT NEED MORE (LIKE CYMBOLS OR SOME SNARES MAYBE) BUT THE SONG IS STILL VERY GOOD!


theta4 responds:

Thank you. I'm glad you liked the synths. I was aiming for something out of a Showtek song. Showtek is awesome.

Anyway, I'll remember your suggestions when I am finalizing the song.

Also, I think your caps lock button is stuck ;)