interesting and innovative

your intro shaker was at a great level and your kick was appropriate this time. i can tell you you were somewhat building to 1:17 but it was really subtle because there was not very much excitement in the transfer. that metal bang you used in place of a snare in the beginning was great, very cool great usage and it had a nice attack on it. swooped in. during the soft part just before 2 minutes it was nice, i liked how atmospheric it was. so far the song is kinda funky! here next you have what is called blue notes i believe which are notes that dont go to the key but to me they were not done right i did not enjoy the intense sections melody it needs more control and structure for right now unless you revise it.

at 2:44 the HH is way to hard and loud. throughout the piece your bass is subtle and not really part of the groove as much as the atmosphere and i liked that. the main rhythm here comes from the treble parts so try to embrace that. the melody of your pad is really weird and i dont think towards the end it match what was going on but only in one spot or two kindal like the little parts at 3:55.

i noticed you drop the drums at the end of pieces, quite frequently. this is cool but you can do that during the song more and kinda mix it up. also at the very beginning of the song you have a sample and i know it is because you dont have that crash hat anywhere else in the song.try to not useobvious samples in your drums lol. but i myself must be careful of that.

but i will say it is good that you are thinking about calling the attention right off because after you do that people are carefully listening and expect a build.

you have really shown that you improved here in this song.

i hope you are exploring the synth parameters and making original synths :)
that is something people neglect sometimes. but im bias since i love synths. anyway good work on this