Well, the song has a interesting concept with the bass. Its like psytrance but with the typical house bass. Neat idea...here is what I thought.
1) The bass sounds good, but I think it is a bit too overpowering. I also don't think the psytrance bass pattern was the best for this song. It didn't get me dancing as much as if a trance bass were playing it.
2) I think your support high pitch instruments were more as fillers. The composition lacked ingenuity....but then you said you made this in the "spur of the moment". Makes sense why I'm not hearing any diversity to this song.
3) You sparsely put some unique drum patterns in which is a good thing. This song seems to be a drum n bass show rather than a house show.
Overall, you didn't really give me much to critique. The bass plays the same pattern for the entire song and the high pitch instruments don't play a significant role to even bother noticing. However, you made this for fun and I guess that's what counts.
5/5 vote and 9/10 review. Continue making music.
Bye for now