A big improvement from your last version of this song! It definitely feels a lot more complete now that your main melody is backed by different instruments and rhythms. I can definitely see your original vision in this version of the song. However, the song starts and ends kind of abruptly. Maybe start off with small hints of the back-up rhythms? As for the ending, it feels like it stops in the middle of a musical thought, if you will. Find a way to finish that thought and smooth it out to the end. Overall a very good piece!