You did a good job on this piece, it is much less repetitive than Midnight.
My suggestion this time involves the drums, which are repetitive. The beat is pretty much the same the entire time, which can really bring a piece down when you're trying to build a climax. You use the drum beat as a transition between parts within piece, which is good. But if you're going to do that makes sure it's epic. For example, around 2:06 where the piece builds back up. You could do more with the drum beat there to provide a better transition. Over all, shake up the drum beat a bit more; the slightest nuances go a long way in making an excellent piece. Otherwise, great job.
Hey, thanks for the comments! Unfortunately, I didn't read this review until after I made the final cut for my upcoming album. However, I have significantly altered the entire song and the new version is featured on my new web page: http://sycrossmusic.com/
Please check it out and let me know what you think of the new version!
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.