Well, for starters, what was that bass and drum riff in the beginning for?
Second, not a bad sound from the Synth, the..I believe it was a Piano, didn't mix as well due to some notes being played that didn't flow and ended up sounding like it was too sharp of a note for the first part.
Possibly drop the piano or change some of its notes.The bass beat near the end was very well placed and flowed well. As well as the Guitar. It flowed well.
Overall, this piece should be expanded into something. I see something great if you take some time to make everything flow together, maybe write some lyrics, that all depends on you.
Not bad. 7/10
Whoa, thanks for the input, I must admit I was expecting flaming or something for a love song :P. The song segues in from the previous Temperature Rise, so that explains the bass and drum at the beginning. I agree that the piano is a bit weird and that this piece should've been longer, but it's the best I could do at the time. That bass bit at the end was stuck in my head for days before I managed to put it in the song, it's something I got from a NIN song, but I can't remember which...
Thanks again for the ideas :).
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