you were very brave putting this on the portal (with the vocals and everything)
this is definately way better than memory of jen, however your voice definately got fucked up when you put it in fruity lol.
ive experimented with vocals but its hard to make it work right.
as far as the lyrics i couldnt understand them, but i wouldnt show this to anyone else for fear of embarrassment, many people wont be as nice as me about it
Yeah, I'm trying to get a friend who is in my school's chorus to sing it for me, my own voice isn't too wonderful. I noticed that FL3 does that, I think instead, I am going to get a WAV-MP3 converter for anymore vocals... As far as the lyrics are concerned, I have them posted on fp.com (http://www.fictionpress.com/~Soulshifter).
Its interesting, I'll give it that. But thevocals were just a bit off beat and off key. And for the lyrics i could actually understand, weren't really that good. The techno trcak behind it was pretty basic, nothing really stood out or pulled me in. And the song really needs a proper ending. A little more work on the technical side of this song, more balance, and better lyrics, and it could be improved. And perhaps not singing in momotone. Its an idea but didn't survive execution.
Well, I think the lyrics were good... Obviously, it wasn't sung very well. So, I didn't expect good ratings from it on that point.